Hi Ayunie - the ant scene... it still doesn't work, sorry to be the 'voice of doom' again. The scream is pretty horrific now - think of a small comedy sound, a bit more 'Alvin & The Chipmunks' as opposed to 'slaughtered elephant!' I don't like the 'shuddering' shot of the bottom, and it's not convincing that the bottom is actually crushing the ant. How's this for a radical solution... cut the ant joke completely - just show her sitting on the kerb side, lifting her face to the sun, but sitting in what might be described as a not very lady-like way. I just don't think the ant scene is ever going to work the way you want it to...
Hi Ayunie - the ant scene... it still doesn't work, sorry to be the 'voice of doom' again. The scream is pretty horrific now - think of a small comedy sound, a bit more 'Alvin & The Chipmunks' as opposed to 'slaughtered elephant!' I don't like the 'shuddering' shot of the bottom, and it's not convincing that the bottom is actually crushing the ant. How's this for a radical solution... cut the ant joke completely - just show her sitting on the kerb side, lifting her face to the sun, but sitting in what might be described as a not very lady-like way. I just don't think the ant scene is ever going to work the way you want it to...
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